Tuesday, July 27, 2010

What I'm Reading

Master of My Heart

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5120651/1/


This is a BDSM story written by BriannaMarley. I read a number of BDSM stories in fanfiction before I started writing my own. This is a rated M story for obvious reasons.


Bella was in a very bad relationship with James that, after one night, left her nearly dead and with some permanent injuries. In order to try and keep herself from falling into another bad relationship, Bella joins a private BDSM club. There she meets Edward. There is instant chemistry.


I enjoyed the first part of this story. When it started, I had high hopes. However, they quickly dwindled into disappointment. Many of Bella's reactions were over the top and unrealistic for the experienced sub she was supposed to be. I tried to stay with this story, but finally had to give up on it as it had lost all interest for me.


Overall I would give this story two stars.


The Virgin Swan and the Cullen Intuition
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5354644/1/

http://www.twilighted.net/viewstory.php?sid=7865


I found this story through some of the ladies over on the Twilighted chat room. Bella falls head over heals for Edward, her best friend Alice's older brother. Edward is equally smitten, however, there is one problem. Bella is a virgin. And only 17.


This story is written by Kriskahn (fanfiction), Jocasta (Twilighted), and it is rated M/NC-17. Again, it earns it rating. There is a lot of sex in this story.

The connection between Edward and Bella is intense right from the start, but so much is against them. Edward's age. Bella's age. And also the little fact that Charlie hates Edward with a passion. But as with cannon, their love pushes through all of their issues and only makes them stronger.

This story is complete, and I give it four and a half stars.




If you've read any of these stories, let me and others know what you thought by leaving a comment. Remember we all are looking for good stories to read. That's why we're here!

Sunday, July 25, 2010

FB - Chapter 34 Teaser



Angela greeted me with her usual cheerful smile when I got to the office. The morning was busier than usual since I was having to oversee the finance department now that James was no longer in charge. Hopefully HR would have some candidates for me to start interviewing next week.

Just before noon, Angela knocked on my office door to let me know that my cousin had arrived. I’d thought of many different things that I could tell him, however in the end, I’d decided to stick as close to the truth as possible.

Gino’s was packed with the lunch rush today. But since I am such a good customer we were able to get a table fairly quickly. It wasn’t private by any means, but I wasn’t going to say anything incriminating to Emmett.

Our server came to get our orders almost immediately, which gave me a little breathing room. I sat back in my seat enjoying being out of the office even though my thoughts, as they always did, filtered back to Isabella. To what she was doing. If she was alright. Did she miss me as well?

My thoughts were interrupted by Emmett’s rather booming voice. “So what’s going on with you and Carlisle? I got it narrowed down that much.”

“It’s complicated, Emmett,” I started.

Emmett didn’t appear to like that approach. “Oh can it, Eddie. I’m a big boy. Whatever it is, I can handle it.”

I straightened in my seat. “I have no doubts that you can handle it, Emmett. It’s just a rather delicate matter and I’d appreciate it if you’d treat it as such.”

My cousin looked a little taken a back. “Alright,” he said. “Well?”

“The short of it is that Carlisle doesn’t approve of me being with Isabella.”

“Your girlfriend?” Emmett’s surprise was evident.

“Yes. Isabella. My girlfriend.” I couldn’t help but smile at that. It wasn’t something that we had discussed yet. I saw her as my submissive, which to me was much more than just a girlfriend. But my girlfriend would be how the outside world would see her.

Wednesday, July 21, 2010

What I'm Reading

Nightingale Journals

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5731421/1/
http://www.twilighted.net/viewstory.php?sid=10519

I kept seeing this coming up on Twilighted pretty regularly so I decided to give it a try. In this story, Bella is a nurse who works in the PICU. Edward is a doctor. And it is written by kimpy0464.

There are so many stories out there with Edward as a doctor and it was the main reason why I almost didn't try this story. I have to say that I am so glad I pushed my reservations aside and read it. The author is a nurse herself and brings that knowledge to the table to make this more realistic.

It is rated NC-17/M. The author doesn't shy away from the medical issues in the story, but also makes them understandable to the reader. It's a great read and I highly recommend it.

I give this story five stars.

Love In My Box

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5782455/1/

I saw a banner for this story as a favorite of one of the ladies who frequents the Finding Bella forum over on Twilighted. The story is rated M, and to my knowledge can only be found on fanfiction.net. It is written by cosmoandmarvar.

Edward and Bella meet up in Miami for spring break and have a one night stand. The problem is that Edward can't stop thinking about Bella so with the little information he has about her, he tracks her down through her college e-mail address. A relationship begins between the two almost entirely based on e-mail letters.

I really liked this story's premise, and the author does a good job of making the characters of Edward and Bella have some unique personality traits. Edward is basically an awkward nerd. Bella is a pretty liberal bookworm.

This story was really pretty borderline for me until the two meet again in person. The author really pulled me in with their interaction. I got that feeling in my chest that I would get when I read certain sense in Twilight.

Overall I would give this story four stars.

Tuesday, July 13, 2010

FB - Chapter 33 Teaser

I had been writing for about twenty minutes when I heard the door open. Edward was home. A warmth spread through my chest as I tossed my journal aside and exited my bedroom.

He was standing in the kitchen when I walked into the main room. His back was towards me as I watched him survey what was cooking. I wanted to go to him, but I was stuck. Rooted in my spot just outside of my bedroom door.

Edward turned around seconds later. A sly smile covered his lips like somehow he’d known I’d been there the whole time. I gave him a shy smile in return.

Talk, I told myself. He said he wanted me to talk. I could do that. At least I was going to try.

“Hi,” I said still a little unsure.

“Hello, Isabella.”

Edward did come towards me like I had hoped. Instead, he leaned back casually against the kitchen counter watching me.

“Um. Dinner should be ready soon,” I managed to squeak out.

He nodded, but didn’t say anything. Had I done something wrong? I mean he had said he wanted me to talk to him. Had he changed his mind? My eyes lowered to the floor and my hands began to tremble. Did I mess up?

“Look at me.”

He was no longer across the room, but standing in front of me. My eyes rose to meet his. They didn’t look angry at all. I started to calm down.

“Tell me what you’re thinking,” he whispered, the back of his right hand caressing my face.

“I thought…I thought maybe I’d done something…wrong,” I whispered.

“Why did you think you had done something wrong?”

“You didn’t…I just…” I paused, took a breath, and looked down shyly. “You stayed in the kitchen. And you didn’t say…” I shrugged. “I wanted…”

“What did you want?” he encouraged.

Wednesday, July 7, 2010

What I'm Reading - Week's 4 & 5

Sorry about not getting a post up last week. We took a trip to see my in-laws for the 4th of July, and it took over everything. Over the last two weeks though, I have done some reading.

Die Tonight, Live Forever

http://www.twilighted.net/viewstory.php?sid=8513

This story would never have crossed by radar had it not been for The Word Lottery. The author, sben3208, is also a reviewer and we were paired up to read each others stories. Die Tonight, Live Forever is a very dark story rated NC-17, and deals with some hard themes such as cutting and multiple personality disorder.

When I started this story I wasn't quite sure how I felt about it, but after one chapter I found I wanted to read the second. Her characters are definitely OOC in this one, but without that it would not be the same story. It is a WIP, and there are currently 17 chapters posted on Twilighted.net. If you like darker stories, then I suggest you give this one a chance.

I give this story four and a half out of five stars.

Fog Over Dartmouth

http://www.twilighted.net/viewstory.php?sid=10545

This is a post-Breaking Dawn story. Three years have passed and now the Cullens have decided to leave Forks. Edward and Bella enroll at Dartmouth. It is written by Milk40, and is rated PG-13.

I like cannon stories. SM left so much unexplored in her books that, when done well, a missing moment story or one exploring possible futures can be a very enjoyable read. This one just didn't fit into that category for me.

The interaction of Bella and Edward in this story is pretty good and for the most part in character. What I found driving me nuts, however, and what made me stop reading before I'd reached all the chapters that the author posted, was the flow of the story. I would be reading along and then all of a sudden there was...well for lack of a better word, jump. Not a total 180 or anything, more of a slight shift like a connecting sentence or two was missing.

When I stopped reading we were just starting to meet an original character. I do think this story has potential, however I found that it was too frustrating to hold my long term interest.

I give this story two and a half stars.